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PostSubject: Holly   Mon Jul 17, 2017 6:42 pm

Name: Holly Gabrielle Cohen
Age: 17
Gender: Female
Sexuality: N/A
fc// (if there's one): Samantha Boscario

Country of Origin: Scotland
Place of Birth (Olympus, city or town): Inverness
Race: White
Skin color:  Pale
Hair color: Black
Eye color: Hazel
Height: 5’11
Weight: 180 Pounds
Body type: Built up and muscular, much like an MMA fighter

God Parent: Letus
Mortal Parent: Janet Cohen

Personality: Holly  is a soft and caring spirirt, wanting everyone to be happy no matter what the cost. Often times she is willing to do and to spend anything to make others happy and it would be considered a flaw of hers to the fact that she wants everyone to be happy no matter what. INside she is hiding a deep depression and sense of guilt for past traumatic events for which she blames herself. Rarely does she let anyone know these thoughts, as to most she acts as joyous and as gay as anyone else.
Talents: Painting, drawing, gardening, makeup, Martial arts, MMA
Flaws (at least three): Overcaring and will do anything for friends, surgery on leg has left it weakened (the surgery was correctively done to fix her pigeon toed stance. Her leg is like her achilles heel, as it is incredibly sensitive and a single hit could bring her down. incredibly sensitive to bullying

Weapon (Celestial bronze/Imperial gold/Egyptian bronze): Imperial gold Khurkri and stiletto
Powers: Can speak to one soul every night, and only within the light of the moon (five posts, ten post cooldown)

History:  Holly was born of letus and her mother in the city of inverness. At a young age she was told she was different, but she swore not to let herself become isolated or discriminated against due to how special she was. Upon the proper age she traveled to the wolf house in California in which she was trained by the wolf Lupa in the roman arts. After leaving the wolf house she went to the camp and has been there ever since. In the camp she has practiced her craft not only in fighting, but also in embalming and funeral rites.


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PostSubject: Re: Holly   Tue Jul 18, 2017 10:28 pm

Hiya!
Your form is good! Except there are a few minor things.
The MMA fighting and Martial arts aren't really abilities, abilities are powers that are passive and require no energy to run, like being able to breathe underwater and talking to animals, that sort of thing, so move those to Talents, please.

Now as for powers, it's good, but you can change it a little. This is a personal thing, but you could change it to like "can summon a soul/spirit to talk to for X posts, with an X post cooldown, but can only do so when they are under the light of the moon" Now, because they can only do it when they are within the light of the moon, which is a limit in of itself, you can have them be able to hold it for longer.

Your form is really good other wise!

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PostSubject: Re: Holly   Tue Jul 18, 2017 10:31 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Holly   Tue Jul 18, 2017 10:50 pm

Hiya!
I didn't mean get rid of the MMA fighting and Martial arts! All I meant was move them over to the talents section. lol, it's totally alright if you have those, just edit them back in and I'll approve your form.

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PostSubject: Re: Holly   Tue Jul 18, 2017 10:52 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Holly   Tue Jul 18, 2017 10:56 pm

¡Aprobado!

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